Whats missing from this portrait?

[bighitboy]

took this awhile ago at some play ground, i like the look and position of it. Whar could be improved? We call it the "pimp" hat lol. i cant shoot humans worth a cent!

[Lava Lamp]

The "pimp's" face is too far way. The framing is a nide idea, but I'd crop it so you don't have the open aspace at both sides of the playset and try to zero in on his face some more.

[mtbbrian]

You should crop it, and crop it tight. As it is, the image is just too busy. I would suggest that you crop it to the frame surrounding him. The lighting looks good.
If you re shoot it, you might also try a heightened point of view, not much of one mind you, just so you are a little more even with the subjects face. And step a little closer too.
Make sense?
Good Luck! Hope to see more, especially some portraits!
Brian