My first model shoot

[FallingLeaves]

This was from my first model shoot. Any feedback would be appreciated.

[Lava Lamp]

This was from my first model shoot. Any feedback would be appreciated.

You have a great location and a great expression. I'd suggest the following for next time:

• Don't place her dead center in the frame - it's very static
• Get closer - the picture is about her but we see comparitively little of her and a lot of background - you could get close at a wide-angle setting and still get some background
• Use fill flash or expose for her face - she is comparatively overexposed - a common problem with backlighting and contributes to her being a little too orange
• Watch the cropping/framing - she needs more space in front of her - or perhaps less - the dress is cut off awkwardly
• Blur the background with a larger aperture - again, to isolate the subject

That's a lot of suggestions. Ultimately, it's up to you to pick and choose what works for you, but see if the attached gives you any ideas.

[jar_e]

Lava Lamp pretty much nailed it. His crop would be ideal in a shot like this, and there all easy things to do in your next shoot. Nice shot and keep on shooting,

Jared

[FallingLeaves]

Thats very helpful Lava Lamp and yes I agree that your image does look better. Many thanks to you both.

[terryger]

not sure i agree.

i hear the same comments repeatedly about comp and am cynical.

how much is what is true and how much is rote?

to look at a photo, out of context as this one is, and make blanket assessments , to me, is a bit gratuitous.

not every photo should be shot from an "artsey" perspective in imo.

because a subject is centered does not detract from comp as long as other features such as lighting, color, contrast, and corrolation with surroundings are in sync.

personally i like the original better.

the problem with this page is i am unable to look at the photo while commenting and this limits my ability to critique, however, at first impression, something that carries a lot of weight on for me, the original would work fine with the proper collection.