Emo...
I Think your idea is good. What I think is amazing is that at 17 you are able to express your feelings in art. It's also amazing that you know that 17 year olds are meladramatic. At that age, I would have fought fiercly saying no I wasn't but that I just felt more than the normal person. lol I think you have a lot of guts going online and posting your work to perfect strangers. It seems your self esteem is in tact and that will help you get through any pain in relationships and not end up like the rose. Does your photo move me? Yes, it hurts me to look at it. It brings back feelings that I would rather not think about. About a time when I was crushed. As for the f word. Well, sometimes it just fits. It's the way your generation expresses yourself so it would be false if you didn't use it. As for the typing. Again, it's a product of your time. The whole piece shows pain felt by a young person. Everything is right in what you're trying to express. Keep working on the execution of it or move on to something else, only when you yourself feel like it's the way you want it. you're the artist.
Kit