The last version is the winner for me. The blue eye shadow works with the red lips and lashes, as i hoped it might. I do like the comp better with the roof out. I love the way the interior looks especially above her head with the bending flap below the rafter.
Rmoving the roof brings on one other nitpik now and that would be to have that rafter right above her head darkened. The entire rafter across the frame could be darkened but especially that brightest area right above her head.

I agree with Tom in that your ideas are always something very original.