View Full Version : nervous first time critue post


andywatson00
03-05-2008, 04:37 PM
i only got my first digital slr today ( canon 400d ) also its my first slr of any type only used basic click shoot cameras before

please be kind...

http://i273.photobucket.com/albums/jj226/andywatson00/thesiege.jpg

its a photo with a demo cd cover in mind for my cuz's band www.thesiege.co.uk
i think the photo goes with there songs riders and allyway if you dont like my photo maybe you will like the music lol

thanks to all who helped me pick my first slr

andy

MB1
03-05-2008, 04:57 PM
Looking at this one image I think that you have a very good eye for composition (although I wish you hadn't cut off the toe of the boot). The other small complaint is that you can see the internal electrics of the guitar in the upper f hole-if you have the photo shop skill you might want to kill that.

Otherwise this is a very striking image and a nice fresh view that tells a story.

Good job.

Greg McCary
03-05-2008, 05:01 PM
I agree with MB1 but I like the selective coloring. I think you could lose the bottle and pills and replace it wiht a beer or whiskey bottle. Just a thought.

Frog
03-05-2008, 05:36 PM
MB1 is right as usual. Not sure what the point of the pills is but then I'm old.

CLKunst
03-05-2008, 05:58 PM
Those look like some heavy duty vitamins Dude! Airborne?
Welcome to the PR Critique forum. You have shown a lot of creativity with your arranged still life here. I've done posters and album covers for bands so if I may, I'd like to give you a few suggestions.

First, I'd lose the carpet as your overall background, perhaps the top of a bar might be more appropriate? At the very least I'd burn out the carpet to black or use a back drop.

Second, if this is for the band make sure you have their name/CD in sharp focus so everyone knows who you're talking about. Right now I have to look hard to read the name.

Third, I assume the boot toe is cut off to keep the frame clear of clutter which is good, but backing up another few inches to include your full "set" makes more sense and give the viewer the feeling that they're not missing any parts of your "Story".

It's a great start and I'm sure the band will appreciate your support no matter what.

Regards,

AgingEyes
03-05-2008, 07:28 PM
Looking at this one image I think that you have a very good eye for composition (although I wish you hadn't cut off the toe of the boot). The other small complaint is that you can see the internal electrics of the guitar in the upper f hole-if you have the photo shop skill you might want to kill that.

Otherwise this is a very striking image and a nice fresh view that tells a story.

Good job.

Also, I'm wondering if it would be better if you could crop it closer to get rid of that "hole" right in the bottom left hand corner. I guess it's either get a bit closer or move back a bit more. But I think I would move back a bit more :D

rylan
03-05-2008, 08:27 PM
very nice image, im a guitar player myself so i really enjoy this, i agree about the boot being cut off and maybe try a black background, or possibly darker solid colour.

the pills must stand for all the drugs used by the rockstars maybe? id put a jack daniels bottle there or something i think it would suit it better!

over all great work and post up some more!

gahspidy
03-05-2008, 09:54 PM
Glad to see you getting up and running with your new gear already. I agree that you have a good sense of composition. There have been some good points made here already. I personally am only bothered by the flash on camera that lit this scene up, and your approach at selective coloring. I think a more natural looking room lighting or even just natural light coming in through the window during the day to light this. the flash on camera just looks to. . .well, like a flash on a camera. As for the selective coloring I like it at times and i think it could work here but I like a more subtle approach to it. Whenever there will be color on b&w, the color only needs to be very subtle otherwise it stands to look too intentional and artificial. . . or doctored.
I like what your doing here and I think your going to be putting up soem quite impressive works in a very short time.