Gatekeeper (Semi-Nude)

Early evening in the entrance to a confederate graveyard outside of Mobile, AL. Shot with an Olympus C2100 UZI & an Vivitar 285HV teathered to the camera via PC sync cord. Flash was held by an assistant to my immediate right, about 3feet away, standing on a 2 foot rock wall. Flash was positioned vertically & bounced off a Lumiquest Pocket Bouncer.

If I may say (as a female) ... this may be inappropriate and not exactly a critique, but ...

*wow* I find this very *hot*.

Excellent in every way. Good job!

Very interesting. I like the dark shadows that the flash produced. Especially the one hiding the models eyes. I think the hidden eyes add a nice touch of mistery to the photo. There is something about the models right hand that bothers me. The cape is partly covering it, but I don't know if I want to see more of it, or less. I also don't like the weed/stick in front of the models left leg.

Other than those two nits, I think it's a pretty "hot" image, to steal Kelly's word.

...but I think it might be worth exploring a bit more. I love the shadow falling across your model's eyes, and the way the rest of the gate shadow forms a pattern on her

Still, to me the overall image lacks depth, and yet doesn't look like it's suppose to be flat. The area behind the model (brick column?) is a little ambiguous, but not in a cool mysterious way. Maybe a tad more light throw back there (upper left corner) would help...

I also think the cropping is too severe. This, of course, is a personal thing, but I'd prefer to see the model's hands, maybe grabbing the gate, and more of her legs and boots.

Real good combination of subjects, though...

he lack of visable eyes is what bothers me really. Kinda ruins the whole thing. But the consept is great.

I *love* the lack of visible eyes. Focuses attention on the lips, which are mysterious and gothic. I think if I saw eyes it would ruin the softly sinister mood.

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Originally Posted by kellybean

I *love* the lack of visible eyes. Focuses attention on the lips, which are mysterious and gothic. I think if I saw eyes it would ruin the softly sinister mood.

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Thanks for the comments...although I can't reshoot it. Don't live there and the model moved away. Here's another from the same shoot (similar lighting setup)... I call it "Redemption".

make her look meaner!
she looks too kind

other than that...i like it