The Washcloth

[Don Schaeffer]

Down in the breathlessness
where time slows to a stop
the edge of the light
is like a long, soft brush
that flutes
the transparency of things.
Hair like crystal,
communities of boxes,
colored jungles
in the dirt.







10x and 60x

[jordanjez193]

how do we critique this?

[MB1]

I like the first image a lot. The repeating patterns are attractive but since you didn't fill the frame with them the image has some tension. It looks overprocessed to me but I'd be first to admit that is you style and doesn't bother me.

The second one might be ok by itself but the first is better IMO.

[jetrim]

I like the first one much better as well.
Looks like brains

[GB1]

Don - It's an OK abstract. It doesn't have context or a strong message, but it's OK. The pixelating on the bottom one is very obvious and you know I don't like over-processed images, but the subject is different.

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[Don Schaeffer]

Thanks guys. I'm gonna keep trying. lol