mind the gap

[SmartWombat]

easy title, lucky shot
part of a burst mode set with the LZ-5

[Didache]

Just to prove that I don't have the monopoly on tube shots

Cheers
Mike

[SmartWombat]

Actually to get a critique from the master.

For example the train is level.
It's on the opposite track though so there is a huge gap.
Otherwise it really doesn't show from where I was sitting.

But because of perspective the station edge isn't level.
Because of the focal length, the straight lines aren't and the squares of the floor aren't.

I tried fixing it up with perspective adjustment and lens correction.
But I felt it was just plain boring.
When I look at this it's constantly making me look around the image, unsettled.
I like it, but I'm biased.

[seifen]

HI SW:

I very much like the colors on this one. It seems to pull my eyes straight towards the red/blue area. I think b/c of that effect, it shadows the importance of the front tiles, as it perhaps makes them a mere afterthought? So maybe you could have tilted the camera upward. The crooked edge of the platform isn't really a big concern for me.

[Didache]

Paul .. I never guessed there was a train-wide gap there! I would personally be inclined to do one of two things: Either a) crop off some of the tiles (which are a little soft in the foreground anyway) so that the "mind the gap" doesn't split the image in two in the way it does. (I would also straighten it and correct the barrel distortion), or b) use the Skew to pull the "mind the gap" into a more diagonal shape. Maybe this latter idea will accentuate the gap? (I don't know - I'm guessing from looking at the picture).

Cheers
Mike

[MB1]

That is a good catch although I would like to see some of the foreground and right cropped out to focus in on the warning. Nice colors for an underground shot too.

[SmartWombat]

How's this?

[SmartWombat]

Or this one ?

[MB1]

Or this one ?

I like what happened to the lettering and you still kept the moving train horizontal. Plus there is less foreground which seemed like wasted space in your first image.

Much better.

[Irakly Shanidze]

i fully agree with a version presented in a post #7

[Didache]

#7 is the one!

Cheers
Mike

[SmartWombat]

Thanks for leading me to that one, Mike.
Good to see you back, Irakly !
And thank you, but Mike takes the credit for pushing me to try something new.

[Overbeyond]

I also agree about No 7 too Paul; I think it is the best you wiil get with this composition.