Kristyn

[AndersonCAA]

First shoot with this model. Used a Canon 30D, Canon 70-200 2.8L, ISO 200 aperture priority at 4.0, Strobframe 42" gold and translucent reflectors.

[yogestee]

Hi AndersonCAA,,,nice shots...That Canon 70-200 2.8L is a brilliant lens (I have one)...Just a few minor points..The head shot is a bit cool in colour for my liking...Check out the whites of Kristyn's eyes,,they have a slight blue cast and it is too light..It appears you used flash here which was too strong....The full shot of Kristyn has flash shadows behind her...I would have gone in a bit closer to the image of Kristyn sitting down,,,you are shooting her not the garden..
Hope I wasn't too harsh??You have the basis for great pics here and with a bit of Photoshopping etc they could be even better..



Jurgen
Australia

[AndersonCAA]

Thanks for the critique. This was the first ever modeling shoot I've done and we were both pretty happy with the results. Things like flash strength and location can be easily fixed. I just wanted to get a feel for basic lighting, posing, etc. At the time of the head shot it was getting pretty dark so I may have over comped on the flash but like you said, a little PS could fix that up but for right now I wanted to post the shot as is and see what others thought. The fact that she's easy on the eyes sure made my job easier.

[yogestee]

Thanks for the critique. This was the first ever modeling shoot I've done and we were both pretty happy with the results. Things like flash strength and location can be easily fixed. I just wanted to get a feel for basic lighting, posing, etc. At the time of the head shot it was getting pretty dark so I may have over comped on the flash but like you said, a little PS could fix that up but for right now I wanted to post the shot as is and see what others thought. The fact that she's easy on the eyes sure made my job easier.

As a first attempt you did really well....BTW,,,this type of work is addictive!!

Jurgen
Australia

[Anbesol]

good compositions and yes like jurgen pointed out slightly cool but easily fixed.

one thing i might do is try to get her to feel a bit more comfortable, it seems her expression isnt totally relaxed, looks like she might be trying too hard to give you a "neutral" photogenic look. Also - I might ease up on the make up a bit, but then - im that guy that thinks every girl has too much makeup on...

On the good not, again, good compositions and exposures. She looks like a very attractive woman - but i'd certainly like to see her a bit more relaxed and lightened makeup...

[Asylum Steve]

Chris,

I noticed you have other shots from this shoot on your web site, and (all due respect) they seem to be better than what you posted here.

Did you intentionally post what you thought were weaker shots here to get some better feedback about them? Well, if so, that's makes sense, eh?

Anyway, IMO the first shot is fine, light-wise, but the pose is a bit weak. Yeah, she doesn't look completely comfortable, and you usually want the hands and feet all showing unless you have a good reason for them not to be.

In the other two shots, the lighting is a bit off. It is too strong. The hands in the close-up are hotter than the model's face, and the harsh shadow in the full-length shot is distracting.

There are two ways of using electronic flash in an outdoor shot. One is where stylistically, you want it to look (or don't mind it looking) obvious you used a flash. The other is where you try to blend the flash in with the available light.

Your shots are sort of caught in the middle...

BTW cropping often makes or breaks these kinds of shots. A simple way to improve the third pic would be to crop it maybe a little bit below her belt. The shadow behind her would disappear, and the style of the shot would be much stronger...

BTW2, to improve the second pic, try burning in the bench wood and her hands. Also perhaps blurring them a bit more. That would bring the foucs back to her face, where it belongs.

[AndersonCAA]

Thanks for the critique. Like I mentioned in my earlier post, alot of what was critiqued was due to the simple fact that this was the first "modeling" shoot for both of us. We didn't have much time to prepare and shoot and if she looked a but "tense" that's probably because she was. But, with all of the shots I took of her she kept getting more and more relaxed and the photos improved as we went along.

[yogestee]

Thanks for the critique. Like I mentioned in my earlier post, alot of what was critiqued was due to the simple fact that this was the first "modeling" shoot for both of us. We didn't have much time to prepare and shoot and if she looked a but "tense" that's probably because she was. But, with all of the shots I took of her she kept getting more and more relaxed and the photos improved as we went along.

I would organise another shoot with Kristyn and I reckon those will be great images..Often first shoots don't always turn out the way you would like due to nerves and as you said Kristyn was tense..She is easy on the eye and has potential..

Jurgen
Australia

[Lava Lamp]

First shoot with this model. Used a Canon 30D, Canon 70-200 2.8L, ISO 200 aperture priority at 4.0, Strobframe 42" gold and translucent reflectors.

Pretty. I like #1 best, though I would prefer the open space to be to the right rather than the left. The other two seem a bit too heavy on the flash -- especially #2.

Welcome.

[Asylum Steve]

Often first shoots don't always turn out the way you would like due to nerves...

This is very true. Unfortunately, when doing commercial work, there often is no "second shoot", as you work with a model and styling team for a job and that is your scheduled shooting time.

So what a lot of shooters do is more or less a "warm up", where the first look (or CF card or roll of film) is basically a throwaway, yet it serves a valuable purpose. The shooter and the model start the communication process, and just as important, the photog (hopefully) quickly gets an idea of how much direction the model is going to need...

Best case senario? The model gets more comfortable in a hurry with some positive feedback, or even seeing a few of the first shots, and gets a better idea of the look an concept of the shot, and goes with the flow...