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Tim, I really like the lighting, the colors and obviously, the patterns themselves. However, the two "gaps" in the foliage (lower left and upper right corners) bugs me a little. The picture would be more of an abstract and visualy more appealing if the frame was entierly filled with foliage.
I agree with Seb, but I can't for the life of me figure out where I'd crop it to make it work! The other comment that I have is that the 'fronds' in the foreground that you are looking almost directly down at are a bit distracting. Maybe a lower angle and pushing those out of the way would do it?
Beautiful colors and shade patterns though! And the lighting is superb!
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It's a great idea, but I agree it needs to fill the frame, without gaps.
I don't think this can be cropped to that point without losing good parts of the pattern.
I would add that it seems to need a third element. The photo has light and dark green and shadow, but it I believe in addition to a different crop/angle/composition this requires some scale or contrast. Not sure.
The patterns and convergence of the light and dark are neat but not quite finished.
Thanks for taking the time to look at this and write your thoughts. I agree with them. I'm down in the Yukatan for six months and pretty much shooting to document. I kept coming back to that one. It's a neat image, but I couldn't descide if there was anything special about it. Your comments are much appreciated....
Tim,
I think there have been valid points brought up about filling the frame with the foliage and the gaps, but i find that I like the composition here because it has balance and depth and there is plenty of foliage patterns here to keep it interesting in an abstract art way.The dark area at the bottom is brought backl into the composition by the inclusion of that additional piece of foliage filling the space. I feel that a trim of about 1 inch off the bottom and 1/2 inch off the left frame would clean it up just right. This would look very nice in the right matt and frame.
What attracted me to this was the interaction of shadows on the backlit leaves. At the time I shot this, I was more concerned about the placement of the frond centers. I should have got in closer.
I suppose it would have made a better picture if I whacked out some of the things blocking the angle I wanted to shoot at. But, this is on a bio-reserve. Very pretty. Very untouched. So, I didn't consider bending or breaking things out of the way.
Oooh!! Lucky Lucky Tim!!! I am so jealous. Six months in the Yucatan on a bio reserve! Wow!!! That's so cool!!!
I have had the same conflicts about centers vs. edges with these plants. Coming down fro a closer steeper angle might have worked but then you might have lost the impact of the lighting effect. I think it's fine as is. Can't wait to see more posts from you over the next few months.
I quite like this, It looks much better if the vertical lump of shadow on the left is cropped out.
Roger
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I quite like this, It looks much better if the vertical lump of shadow on the left is cropped out.
Roger
Hi Roger,
Do you mean just that sliver to the left. I think that may work. I'll give it a go. Thanks...
Tim
p.s. CLKunst, thanks for the words. Yes, 6 months. I've been shooting mainly to document the adventure of living and working here, with the kids in a local public school, our weekend adventures, etc.. If you are curious, I got a BLOG going on it:
WOW!!!!!!!! What a magnificent dream to live out with your family. Go man Go!!! Your blog is just wonderful, thank you so much for inviting me to see it. I can't wait to see more!
Thanks to all your good comments, I am resubmitting this image. I moved the crop some and tried to bring in some diagonal elements of shadow. Though the image may not be great, it looks (to me) to have better rhythm and balance.
How does this version grab you?
Many thanks in advance,
Tim
Do you mean just that sliver to the left. I think that may work. I'll give it a go. Thanks...
Tim,
Sorry for the delay in responding been busy calibrating - However it was the sliver to the left and the new crop is great
Roger
"I hope we will never see the day when photo shops sell little schema grills to clamp onto our viewfinders; and the Golden Rule will never be found etched on our ground glass."from The mind's eye by Henri Cartier-Bresson
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Canon Powershot Pro 1; Canon Ixus 100
I really like the new crop too. I really liked it as posted originally. For me, it wasn't the "lumps" that bothered me, but rather the starkness of that oddly angled green bit in the lower left. With the crop, it's impact is diminished.
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