deliriumsfrogs,

Hope this isnt too negative, but here goes.

I think there is a lot of potential here, and I think you had a good eye to see it. But there is way too little detail in the main subject, the chokers. The background is WAYYYY too bright, imho, esp at the top. The chokers are also not sharp... and they should be. I have no problems with the shallow DOF, but it should be sharp somewhere, and it simply is not. I view this as a technical mistake: either the things were swinging or the camera was moving or the focus wasnt correct. The shallow DOF demands precise calculations and exactness in those areas, but it just wasn't achieved here. The good news is that those are very correctable - using a tripod is a good start.

Btw try a crop where you only show the bottom 3/5... seems to make it stronger.

GB