First Portrait Attempt... Critic Please...

[blindtheskies]

Hello,

Glad to see that the forum has been updated to a new style... Definitely like the new look of it.

Anyway, here is my first real attempt at studio portrait photography, so feel free to comment and critic it as you see fit; especially considering that a majority of the techniques I used I learned from this very forum. Which image do you prefer?

Here is all the info:
Nikon D2H
Nikon 80-200 AF-S 2.8 Lens
Two Speedotron 202 Lights: One Main @ f4, One Fill @ f2.8, both shot into White Umbrellas
Two Nikon Speedlights: One SB28 for the Background Light, One SB800 for the Hairlight

Thanks in advance for all the comments,
Tom