View from within . . .Room in Abandoned building

I've been sitting on this one for quite a while and recently it has started appealing to me. I'm wondering what the forum thinks of this one.
Thanks . . .

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Ooh! I like it! The very dark at the bottom and the dark doorway on the right give it a sense of doom and hopelessness, which is strengthened when you realize that the only source of light shows a tree that is in pure winter. Is that a radiator along the wall? I think it is and if it is, even the fact that that is black gives it the feeling that there is no warmth to be had. At least, that's how I see it!

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Originally Posted by gahspidy

I've been sitting on this one for quite a while and recently it has started appealing to me. I'm wondering what the forum thinks of this one.
Thanks . . .

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The comp is great, I really enjoy the pattern created by the tree in the window. On the other hand, I feel that this picture could use a little more punch. Perhaps some level works or a simple contrast adjusment. I don't know what would work best but I find the tone to be too muted right now.

regards

Seb

It's a pleasant enough shot but not as compelling as the others in the series. The outside view is bland and there's not too much of interest inside. It fits within the series OK, but won't be one of the strong ones. Sorry this doesn't sound more supportive - maybe the real print holds some detail better.

Hello Gary
My eye can't help wondering about that door on the right and I'm thinking it's inclusion would have given the shot a little enhancement composition and mystery wise. It may not have been possible of course as it may come out as a black rectangle. But ...
Tom

I see more than one scenario for this. It could have the dark feeling as others describe, but at first glance I saw hope. The mood can appeal to many, and it certainly makes one think,great job.

It does seem a little too dark and maybe a contrast adjustment would be in order. I'd either lose the door or try to get more of it. Hard to tell what another person has in mind when composing. I think the mood is right though.

I personally like this. The tree from outside, the contrasty radiator and the floor, and the mysterious door outside. A strong composition IMO, and the contrast of it makes the mood. Add that with the various textures and tones, it's a beautiful pic. Just curious, what lens do you use for this series? Or have you mixed it up a bit...cause all the pics seem to be quite sharp.

Nice shot,

Jared

What's on the wall underneath the window is now beginning to interest me. I there an old poster/painting/drawing or something similar there Gary?

Thanks for the suggestions/comments.
D . . . Glad to know that one can find appeal in this one. That is a cast iron radiator. The time of year is just coming into spring, but that tree is dead I think. Thanks for your thoughts.

Seb . . .thanks for the comments. I will agree about wanting to see more contrast and will bring it up some. the levels are showing true whites and blacks, but perhaps going up to some more extremes will gives this more pop.

Chunk . . .always happy to know your feeling on a picture. I agree it would'nt be one of the stronger additions, but it is starting to grow on me to the point of including it.

Tom . . .yes, the door. I definetely did not want to include the whole door, but rather give the viewer just an idea of more mystery in the room than just the window. Under the window is water damaged palster board and peeling paint. Also, some of the tree branches are coming through the window and down in that area. It is difficult to see these things on the screen but they would be mor evident in print. Thanks for commenting

payn817 . . .interesting that you saw hope in this. It always amazes me at the different way in which we can all view the same scene. Glad to know how you see this.

swmdrayfan . . . thanks for the comments. I agree with bringing up the contrast some more. The door I find I like as it is in the comp. It is only intended to give a glimpse into some deeper mystery of the room.i appreciate your thoughts

Jared . . .thanks, always glad to hear when someone finds it works for them. Most of the comps are shot with the Tamron 28-75 XR Di lens which is very good, especially for the money. some shots, especially the older ones were taken with the Tamron 19-35. i have sinced replaced that lens with the Canon 17-40 4L and will most likely be using that one very often for future compositions.

I like this picture, but think it might work better farther down the hall with more of a tunneling affect.

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Originally Posted by Iflygti83

I like this picture, but think it might work better farther down the hall with more of a tunneling affect.

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Thanks for the comment. you bring up an interesting suggestion. when setting up this shot, I had tried several different approaches. One of them was what you had suggested. What happened with that approach was the black area in the doorway dominated the entire right side of the frame and it just did not feel right in the viewfinder. Moving back even more was somewhat interesting, but then I felt that the window would have blown out from the mostly dark room, and it also was becoming much smaller and distant in the composition, losing my original intent and concept of this series. However, I do wish i had shot one anyway just to see and decide later.