ENTER... mortal...

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  • 02-05-2011, 02:00 AM
    hminx
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    ENTER... mortal...
    The halls of academia can be impressive
  • 02-06-2011, 11:17 AM
    gahspidy
    Re: ENTER... mortal...
    I love the entrance to this place and your framing and treatment is pretty good. I am not getting anything from the person entering though. . .almost wish she was not there. She looks too modern day, and she is really obscured by having her back to us and blocked by the stone and gate.
    i'm feeling i would have liked to see a gentleman or lady standing in the doorway or walking in already near the doorway. Anything, but just not feeling the person you have there is the right thing for this scene.
    I do see some blurred areas below the statue which seems odd. Was there post work there?

    Nice comp and great subject.
  • 02-06-2011, 02:52 PM
    Greg McCary
    Re: ENTER... mortal...
    I agree with Gary's comments this one could stand on it's own without the human element. The B&W treatment is very good. I also think you could use a little more space on the right. I keeper with a little more work.
  • 02-07-2011, 08:15 AM
    LeeIs
    Re: ENTER... mortal...
    The tones are nice. I like the deep black and nice middle tones. not over or under exposed. I also enjoy all the lines in this, including the bottom fence also. I kinda wish the statue was composed to sit in the black area of the open door. that would've made it more of a center of attention. but that's just compositional preference.

    i like it.
  • 02-07-2011, 01:16 PM
    GB1
    Re: ENTER... mortal...
    This one has a lot of good stuff happening, but I think the composition could be adjusted. I want to see more of the lower area (seems chopped off there). I agree that the woman there doesn't add anything and may distract. I also wonder what it would be like if the frame was panned to the right, leaving more space in front of the statue's eyes.

    Note that this is all subjective stuff.

    G
  • 02-08-2011, 01:44 AM
    hminx
    Re: ENTER... mortal...
    Thanks guys working on rehash incorporating your suggestions
  • 02-08-2011, 01:25 PM
    ccd333
    Re: ENTER... mortal...
    I think the human element does provide some scale, but otherwise undesirable....agreed. I also like the vertical lines that enhance the comp, and the B&W. Seems to have a bit of a sepia tone which adds to the weathered nature of the scene.